Yanwei Qiu · Case 01 · Humanize AI text

Three AI drafts, rewritten to sound like the person who sends them.

ClientSolo newsletter writer. Productivity for freelancers, about 4,000 subscribers, one email a week.
Brief"I draft in ChatGPT to save time, but readers say it sounds like ChatGPT. Make three pieces sound like me."
Inputs3 AI drafts + 4 past issues written by hand. The past issues built the Voice Spec at the bottom.
Delivered3 rewrites with every change annotated, a one-page Voice Spec, and a prompt card for the next draft.

The three "before" texts are AI drafts written for this case study. No real client's work is shown.

underlined = an AI tell that was cut grey = the draft · black = the rewrite

Newsletter intro

WEEKLY EMAIL · OPENING PARAGRAPHS
Before · AI draft112 words

In today's fast-paced world, freelancers are constantly juggling multiple clients, deadlines, and responsibilities. It's no secret that staying productive can feel like an uphill battle. But here's the thing: productivity isn't about doing more—it's about doing what matters.

In this week's issue, we'll delve into three game-changing strategies that can help you reclaim your time, boost your focus, and ultimately unlock your full potential. Whether you're a seasoned freelancer or just starting out, these insights are designed to empower you to work smarter, not harder.

So grab a cup of coffee, settle in, and let's dive in!

After94 words

Last Tuesday I had four client calls, two invoices overdue, and a proposal I kept opening and closing without typing a word. By 6pm I had done a lot and finished nothing.

This issue is about that gap. I'll show you the three changes I made to my week after that Tuesday: a hard stop on calls at 2pm, one invoice day instead of five, and a proposal template I stopped rewriting from scratch. Together they gave me back about six hours a week.

Try one of them this week and reply to tell me which.

What changed
  • Opened on a specific Tuesday instead of "today's fast-paced world." A reader can picture four calls and two overdue invoices. Nobody can picture a landscape.
  • Named the three strategies instead of promising them. "Reclaim, boost, unlock" told the reader nothing; "hard stop at 2pm" tells them everything.
  • Cut the contrast trick ("isn't about doing more—it's about doing what matters") and the em dash that carried it.
  • Replaced "let's dive in" with one action and a reply prompt. The email now asks for something.
  • Removed every adverb.

LinkedIn post

SOCIAL · SINGLE POST
Before · AI draft78 words

I used to think that being busy meant being productive.

Then I burned out.

Here's what I learned:

✅ Saying no is a superpower✅ Rest is not a reward, it's a requirement✅ Your calendar reflects your priorities

It's not about working harder. It's about working smarter.

Freelancers, this one's for you. Your time is your most valuable asset. Protect it fiercely.

What's one boundary you've set that changed everything? 👇

#Freelancing #Productivity #WorkLifeBalance

After108 words

In March I took a retainer I didn't want because the client was polite about it and I was scared of a quiet month. It paid $1,800. It cost me every Sunday for eleven weeks, plus the two better clients I turned down in May.

I now keep one number on a sticky note above my monitor: the rate I won't go under. I wrote it the week that retainer ended. I've said no twice since. Both times the quiet month I feared didn't come.

If you freelance, write your number down today. Mine sits below what I quote and above what I used to accept.

What changed
  • Replaced the "I used to think / Then / Here's what I learned" scaffold with one story that has a month, a dollar figure, and a cost.
  • Killed the checkmark list. Three abstract nouns in a row is the strongest AI tell on LinkedIn.
  • Cut "superpower," "fiercely," "changed everything," and the "not X, it's Y" pattern, twice.
  • Dropped the hashtag row and the "👇 what's yours?" bait. The ask is now concrete: write one number down.
  • Sentence lengths now run from 5 words to 31. The draft's were all 8 to 12.

About page

WEBSITE · BIO
Before · AI draft104 words

Hi, I'm Sam! I'm a productivity coach and writer passionate about empowering freelancers to thrive in the modern economy. With over 8 years of experience navigating the freelance landscape, I've helped hundreds of independent professionals unlock their potential, streamline their workflows, and achieve sustainable success.

Every week, I share actionable insights, proven frameworks, and real-world strategies to help you take your freelance business to the next level. My mission is simple: to help you build a career that works for you—not the other way around.

Ready to transform your freelance journey? Subscribe below and join a community of driven, ambitious creators.

After109 words

I'm Sam. I've freelanced as a copywriter since 2018, first from a shared desk in Leeds and now from a spare room with a door that locks. For the first three years I worked most weekends and made less than at my last salaried job. For the last five I've made more and stopped working Saturdays.

This newsletter is the notebook I kept while figuring out the second part. One email a week, about 600 words, on the unglamorous mechanics of freelancing: pricing, saying no, invoicing, the calendar.

About 4,000 people read it. Most are one to five years in, which is the stretch where the work is steady and the money still isn't.

What changed
  • Swapped "8 years navigating the landscape" for 2018, Leeds, a spare room, and a door that locks. Credentials became a life.
  • Admitted the bad years before claiming the good ones. Trust comes from the first three years, not from "hundreds of professionals."
  • Deleted twelve words that describe no one: passionate, empowering, thrive, navigating, unlock, streamline, actionable, proven, transform, journey, driven, ambitious.
  • Replaced "Ready to transform your journey?" with a plain description of who reads it. The reader decides if that's them.
  • No em dash, no "not the other way around," no three-item list of abstractions.
PieceDirectnessRhythmTrustAuthenticityDensityTotal / 50
Newsletter · before3232313
Newsletter · after9899843
LinkedIn · before4222414
LinkedIn · after9999844
About · before2321210
About · after9899944
Scored 1–10 per dimension on a five-part rubric (directness, rhythm, trust in the reader, authenticity, density). Pass line is 35. Every draft failed; every rewrite passes.
Deliverable · one page

Voice Spec · Sam

What the client keeps. Every future draft, by a person or a model, gets checked against this.

In one line

Sam writes to a freelancer friend across a café table: tells them what happened, with numbers, and leaves them with one thing to try.

Sounds like

  • A specific day, a dollar amount, a sticky note. Nouns you can picture.
  • First person, past tense for the story. Second person for the ask.
  • Admits what didn't work before saying what did.
  • Two to four sentences per paragraph. One idea each.

Doesn't sound like

  • A keynote. No "empower," "journey," "unlock."
  • A listicle. No three abstract nouns in a row.
  • A poster. No line that would work on a mug.
  • An announcer. No "here's the thing," "let's dive in," "in today's world."

Rhythm

Open with a scene, two or three sentences. Then the point. Then one ask. Mix a six-word sentence with a twenty-five-word one. If three in a row are the same length, break one. End on the ask or a plain fact. Never on a quotable.

Signature moves

  1. A number in the first two sentences. Four calls. $1,800. Eleven weeks. 2018.
  2. The failure first. The retainer Sam shouldn't have taken comes before the sticky-note rule.
  3. One small action, then "reply and tell me."

Banned words

leverageunlockempowerdelvegame-changerjourneythrivenavigatelandscapestreamlineactionableinsightsprovensuperpowerfiercelyultimatelyseamlesslytransformelevaterobustpassionatedrivenambitiousnext level

Banned patterns

  • "It's not about X, it's about Y" and every cousin
  • "Here's the thing" · "Here's what I learned" · "In today's ___ world" · "Whether you're X or Y" · "Let's dive in"
  • Em dashes. Use a period or a comma.
  • Checkmark bullets, emoji bullets, hashtag rows, "Ready to ___?" CTAs
  • Ending a paragraph on a punchy one-liner
  • Adverbs. If the verb needs one, pick a better verb.

Micro-examples

DraftSam
Your time is your most valuable asset. Protect it fiercely.I keep one number on a sticky note above my monitor: the rate I won't go under.
Whether you're a seasoned freelancer or just starting out…Most readers are one to five years in, which is the stretch where the work is steady and the money still isn't.
Let's dive in!Try one of them this week and reply to tell me which.

Prompt card · paste before the next draft

You are drafting for Sam, who writes a weekly newsletter for freelancers.

Voice: a freelancer talking to a freelancer friend at a café. First person,
past tense for stories. Second person for the ask. Plain words.

Every piece must:
- Open with a specific scene: a day, a number, an object. Not a generalization.
- Say what didn't work before what did.
- End with one concrete action and an invitation to reply.

Never use: leverage, unlock, empower, delve, game-changer, journey, thrive,
navigate, landscape, streamline, actionable, insights, proven, superpower,
transform, elevate, robust, passionate, driven, ambitious, next level,
or any adverb.

Never use these structures: "It's not about X, it's about Y"; "Here's the
thing"; "In today's world"; "Whether you're X or Y"; "Let's dive in";
em dashes; checkmark or emoji bullets; hashtag rows; "Ready to ___?";
ending a paragraph on a one-liner.

Vary sentence length. Two to four sentences per paragraph. Under 150 words
unless told otherwise.